student athletes and payment
Discipline: English 101
Type of Paper: Other
Academic Level: High school
Paper Format: APA
Question
Look at the essay and see how you can improve it and answer the questions. 1) Where do you see an important opportunity to integrate source material into your draft more effectively, what is your source integration change (related to a signal phrase, quote, paraphrase, or in-text citation), and why do you believe this source integration change makes your essay more effective? Show us the original (incorrect) version from your draft, show us the new (correct) version, and explain (in two or three sentences) why you believe the source integration change makes your essay more successful. (For instance, if you find a place where you need to give one of your sources credit for her or his wording, then show us where you have used the source's exact wording without giving proper credit and then show us how you have given the source proper credit. Alternatively, if you have neglected to include a signal phrase or in-text citation in your workshop draft, then show us where and then illustrate the correction you have made.)
NOTE: See the tutorial for an example of how to show one or more source integration changes you've made to one excerpt from your draft.
2) Where do you see an important opportunity to edit your draft, what is your editing change (related to spelling, grammar, or punctuation), and why do you believe this editing change makes your essay more effective? Show us the original (unedited) version from your draft, show us the new (edited) version, and explain (in two or three sentences) why you believe the editing change makes your essay more successful. (For instance, if you notice an error pattern related to your use of incorrect punctuation, then show us where you are using the incorrect punctuation and then show us the edited version with the correct punctuation.)
NOTE: See the tutorial for an example of how to show one or more editing changes you've made to one excerpt from your draft.